Now that your characters are dealt with, it's time for mechanics. Buckle up, people!
- Does the story have a hook?
- Does the opening line capture your style/tone and introduce the reader to your fictional world?
- Does your story start in the middle of the action?
- Does your story start with one of the two main characters?
- Do you give enough info about the main characters (especially the heroine) to make the reader care about them?
- Are a few positive traits introduced early on?
- Do the characters do something- ideally within the first chapter- that "characterizes" them?
- Do the hero/heroine (h/h) initially experience extra awareness, not overwhelming attraction?
- Does their first interaction effectively set the tone for the rest of the book?
- Is there info-dump (BADBADBADBAD- ahem. Sorry)?
- Can the reader empathize with the heroine?
- Does the beginning action showcase the characters and their situation?
Does the action start inside a character's point of view (to draw the reader in)?